I’m coauthoring a science article with another scientist. We’re passing a Word document back and forth, making edits and revisions. My coauthor is a good scientist, but an awful writer. I recently made major revisions to clean up grammar, logical flow, and tone, almost completely rewriting the article, but got it to a state where I was happy to submit for publication. I send it back to him, just expecting a sign-off. Instead, he gived it back to me with a bunch of additional revisions. I want to emphasize, he is a native English speaker.
Here is an example of what happened:
What I wrote: While the Poisson-Boltzmann model can accurately predict the electrostatic behavior of our system (Fig. 3), it fails to capture the full free energy (Fig. 3B, dashed lines). In order to do that, we turn to entropic effects, discussed in the next section.
My coauthor’s “revision”: As you see in fig 3 and especially the dashed lines, Poison boltzmann can get right the electrostatic energetical part, so to speak, but not with the total free ebergy. A bias we think because there is not entropy considleration. We can talk about it in the next section below, too.
My coauthor: I think it’s looking great! Are we ready to submit?
Me: …we were.